"So, anybody with a hundred and fifty thousand and a garage could have fabbed these?"
"Oh sure," the old man shrugged nonchalantly "as long as the neighbors didn't mind all the noise, you could afford the power and water bill, and you could stand the constant hundred plus heat that would be generated by the production.
"But then you have to factor in one other thing: so you got a variety of great cartridges, and I mean that: what fires them?"
"Right," Harper nodded as the realization dawned on him.
"The entire purpose of a firearm is to deploy a projectile. You know that. This little thing here," he held up a bindle with a small cartridge in it "looks like a nine, but it’s not: somewhere between thirty-eight and nine, and inside, it’s blacker than space. Now, of course it’s going to be black, you’re burning powder, right? But the burn isn’t just collected on the surface, with a little heat discoloration; it’s burned and pocked into the metal and that’s not even brass. My guess is titanium, maybe a ceramic composite. These things are fast and hot. No, make that HOT. I wouldn’t be at all surprised if the round is actually burning.
"This big one," he held up another bindle "is a lot like an elephant round; and then you have these" he held up bindle with two casings that looked like D-cell batteries "are a lot like an ordinance round: bean bags, smoke grenades, that sort of thing.
"You add all that up: ordinance, weaponry, fabrication costs; manufacturing constraints and over head and you’re probably looking at closer to five hundred thousand or a million."
"Well, darn," Harper snapped his fingers. "There goes my garage theory."
"Out of the boat, and into the lake," the old man chuckled.
"Keep your ear to the ground for me?" Calvin asked as he picked his coat up.
"Absolutely," the old man nodded his head earnestly as he began dropping the bindles back into the large manilla envelope that they had been dumped from.
"Thanks for all you help," Calvin pulled his left glove on and held out his bare right hand.
"Any time," Calvin caught the sincerity in the old man’s eyes as he shook his hand firmly. "And tell Fletcher that just because it’s his turn don’t mean he can’t come around once in a while. Or at least call."
"I’ll do that, sir" Calvin said as he pushed the door open.
"And if you fellas ever need anything, hardware wise" he said with a wink "you come round here and we’ll see that you’re set up proper.
"No other place will even come to mind," and the door closed with a soft whisper, sealing the two men apart.
Calvin turned towards where he had left the car, his hands stuffed down in his coat pockets, shoulders hunched up about his neck, trying to shut out the cold that his up turned collar could not stop.
Things were supposed to be simpler now: he was supposed to have found out where the casings had been bought, get a sales receipt with the purchaser’s name and address and phone number printed clearly on it, call up said Johnny Lawbreaker "Yeah, will you be home at, say, Four, so that we can raid you home while you’re still in it? No? That won’t work? What about four-thirty or five then?" There weren’t supposed to be more questions about exotic rounds and spaceman pistols and gold plated machinery from the sun and planet destroying manufactory.
Calvin sighed in resignation, like a child that’s just been told that he will have to wait for his treat. A warmth, deep down in his chest, that had sparked to life when the old man had said "Well, bucko" was slowly beginning to grow. If he had wanted it easy, he would have stayed full-time with his father, programing AI’s and working out the kinks in MILOTREC’s quantum mechanics calculators.
Saturday, December 29, 2007
Sunday, June 17, 2007
Chapter 2: Suppositions
Calvin Harper leaned against the glass counter-slash-display case and looked at the old man over the top of his glasses. He tugged the cloves off of his hands. He was going to be here for a while. It was a refreshing change to find someone that not only seemed willing to help, but actually might know what he was talking about.
"There's a pot, on the burner, in the back room. Some cups on the counter too," the old man indicated with a snap of his head toward the back of the store.
It was a small shop, but what it lacked in size, it made up for in volume. Glass display cases ran paralel with all four walls, each case neatly packed full of handguns. Rifles and shotguns and semi-automatic sporting carbines, stood at ease in their brackets on the walls, calmly awaiting their inspection and hopeful requisition. A single, wide, double sided isle ran down the middle of the store, its contents a collection of accesories and ammunition.
Calvin shrugged out of his overcoat and laid it across the glass case, at the end of the long row of plastic bindle baggies, each containing a different type of spent casing. Evidence from the alley.
He straightened his silver suit jacket and turned towards the back of the room, his black Italian dress shoes made little "squock-squock" sounds on the highly polished floor.
"You work with Fletcher Gereld?" the old man called after Calvin as he steped through the open door into the back room.
"That obviouse, huh," Calvin called back as he picked up the only mug next to the coffee pot and tipped it over, making sure to knock whatever might be in it, out. Never mind the dried ring in the bottom, the fresh coffee would take care of it. He didn't see any creamer and so didn't bother looking for any. These "chance" encounters where like job interviews: say the wrong thing, make the wrong expression, and it's "Don't call us, we'll call you."
"Gereld always had a nose for the help.
"Where'd you graduate from?"
"Didn't" Calvin replied as he returned to the counter with the mug in one hand and the pot in the other. He held it up and the old man, without looking, reached behind him and picked up an odd, mishapen vessel and held it out for the coffee. "I was homeschooled. My father was a genius, I managed to inherit a couple of his, odder cells, and so I was done with school by fourteen and then we moved overseas, and then it was from town to town to town. Wherever the work was."
"Even after you were old enough to go out on your own?" the old man paused in his inspection of one of the bindle bound casings, and looked up.
"By then I was a full partner in his business. Computers. Oh, I took some classes, when I could. I just took what I needed." Calvin shrugged nonchallantly, the fabric of the suit coat bunching over the roll of his muscular shoulders. "All they tried to do in college was 'educate' me. Also Know As 'indoctrinate.' Little Mind-Numbed Robot Factories. Nothing like going into a place and being told by a moron that you're the stupid one and that you'll 'always be stupid unless you think like me.'"
The old man just grunted in affirmation.
Calvin sipped the black, astringent coffee and watched the shop owner inspect each casing, as meticulously as possible through the plastic baggies.
"Well, Bucko," the old man set the last casing down and straightend up, pocketing the loupe that had been pressed to his right eye, a white ring around his eye was quickly turning to pink, "you've caught a bully this time."
"Oh?" Calvin straightened, his pulse quickening. It had been three hours of, "Who are you?", "Get a warrent", "Sorry, can't help you", "I'm just the hired help, I don't know nothin'" before he had stopped into the this "hole-in-the-wall" place.
"Oh yeah" the old man put his left arm up on the glass for the first time since Calvin had come in. A silver cap covererd the end of his arm where his wrist should have been. "My brother thought it was a quail," he winked and smiled at Calvin's curious expression.
"Half these rounds are stardard, off the shelf ammo. A quarter are milspec only, and the others . . . Home made, is the only word that comes to mind. But you would need fifty thousand dollars worth of equipment to make these casings.
"You say these where in an alley?"
"Yes. About a thousand times what I have here."
"Seriously?"
"Quite."
The old man was quiet, he sipped his coffee from the chipped and cracked and mishapen mug, and looked over the bindle baggies again. Calvin could now see the I Luv Daddy painted on the side.
"There's a pot, on the burner, in the back room. Some cups on the counter too," the old man indicated with a snap of his head toward the back of the store.
It was a small shop, but what it lacked in size, it made up for in volume. Glass display cases ran paralel with all four walls, each case neatly packed full of handguns. Rifles and shotguns and semi-automatic sporting carbines, stood at ease in their brackets on the walls, calmly awaiting their inspection and hopeful requisition. A single, wide, double sided isle ran down the middle of the store, its contents a collection of accesories and ammunition.
Calvin shrugged out of his overcoat and laid it across the glass case, at the end of the long row of plastic bindle baggies, each containing a different type of spent casing. Evidence from the alley.
He straightened his silver suit jacket and turned towards the back of the room, his black Italian dress shoes made little "squock-squock" sounds on the highly polished floor.
"You work with Fletcher Gereld?" the old man called after Calvin as he steped through the open door into the back room.
"That obviouse, huh," Calvin called back as he picked up the only mug next to the coffee pot and tipped it over, making sure to knock whatever might be in it, out. Never mind the dried ring in the bottom, the fresh coffee would take care of it. He didn't see any creamer and so didn't bother looking for any. These "chance" encounters where like job interviews: say the wrong thing, make the wrong expression, and it's "Don't call us, we'll call you."
"Gereld always had a nose for the help.
"Where'd you graduate from?"
"Didn't" Calvin replied as he returned to the counter with the mug in one hand and the pot in the other. He held it up and the old man, without looking, reached behind him and picked up an odd, mishapen vessel and held it out for the coffee. "I was homeschooled. My father was a genius, I managed to inherit a couple of his, odder cells, and so I was done with school by fourteen and then we moved overseas, and then it was from town to town to town. Wherever the work was."
"Even after you were old enough to go out on your own?" the old man paused in his inspection of one of the bindle bound casings, and looked up.
"By then I was a full partner in his business. Computers. Oh, I took some classes, when I could. I just took what I needed." Calvin shrugged nonchallantly, the fabric of the suit coat bunching over the roll of his muscular shoulders. "All they tried to do in college was 'educate' me. Also Know As 'indoctrinate.' Little Mind-Numbed Robot Factories. Nothing like going into a place and being told by a moron that you're the stupid one and that you'll 'always be stupid unless you think like me.'"
The old man just grunted in affirmation.
Calvin sipped the black, astringent coffee and watched the shop owner inspect each casing, as meticulously as possible through the plastic baggies.
"Well, Bucko," the old man set the last casing down and straightend up, pocketing the loupe that had been pressed to his right eye, a white ring around his eye was quickly turning to pink, "you've caught a bully this time."
"Oh?" Calvin straightened, his pulse quickening. It had been three hours of, "Who are you?", "Get a warrent", "Sorry, can't help you", "I'm just the hired help, I don't know nothin'" before he had stopped into the this "hole-in-the-wall" place.
"Oh yeah" the old man put his left arm up on the glass for the first time since Calvin had come in. A silver cap covererd the end of his arm where his wrist should have been. "My brother thought it was a quail," he winked and smiled at Calvin's curious expression.
"Half these rounds are stardard, off the shelf ammo. A quarter are milspec only, and the others . . . Home made, is the only word that comes to mind. But you would need fifty thousand dollars worth of equipment to make these casings.
"You say these where in an alley?"
"Yes. About a thousand times what I have here."
"Seriously?"
"Quite."
The old man was quiet, he sipped his coffee from the chipped and cracked and mishapen mug, and looked over the bindle baggies again. Calvin could now see the I Luv Daddy painted on the side.
Friday, April 20, 2007
Chapter 1, Part Aiii
"Well, as you can tell," Joe began, gesturing with a gloved hand at the ground at the foot of the wall, "looks like a bunch of people came up and over. There are three trails leading off into the tall grass. That one there, in the middle, almost due West, looks pretty well traveled. Pro'bly three, four people, at least.
"Maybe they came up that way and when they went back over, some went back the way they came, one or two went in to the North there, and one went in to the South, there."
His audience followed the movements of his hands, like the heads of small dogs following the master's treat.
Isabele looked down the grassy hill, down towards the lake and the hazy far side of Crater Park and sucked her teeth. "Is Fletcher right there?"
Joe looked back over his shoulder. "Inspector Fletcher!" he called into the alley. "He's coming," he informed the expectant group. With a snap of his head he indicated when Fletcher had arrived.
"Fletcher?" Isabele shouted.
"Yes, Isabele."
"Fletcher, we're gonna have to go into the park."
"I thought as much," came the response. "Proceed with caution."
Isabele turned to her partner as she dug in an inside pocket, producing a black device, like a bicycle grip. "Well?" she asked as she pressed a button on the flat washer-like top.
"Oh." Felicity said dryly, tucking her chin in. "It's in the car. I left mine in my handbag."
"Not gonna help you do you job there, now is it," Isabele scolded quietly.
"Fletcher," she called back over the wall. "Van Hollen forgot her Jipsloc"
An identical black device came floating up into Joe's hands on the wall and with a flic he tossed the GPS Locator to Felicity.
"You do have your camera, right?" Isabele said from the top of her eyes as she finalized the setting on the GPSLOC.
Felicity nodded eagerly.
"Anything that looks remotely suspicious, shoot it. We'll go over it back at the house,"
"Right," Felicity acknowledged smartly as she set her GPSLOC.
"You." Isabele pointed at the younger officer who had kept Felicity talking, rapid fire, for the entire walk. "You're with me," and she turned out to follow the "North" trail as Felicity turned to follow the heavily traveled trail straight down into the park.
They followed off to the side, not wanting to disturb any microscopic evidence that might still remain on the beaten down path. They moved slowly in the tall grass, scanning the trail with meticulous, trained eyes. It's amazing how wonderful of a creation the brain is. How a carpenter will see a sixteenth or a thirty-second of an inch; or how a trained investigator will see the outline of a footprint in living grass.
Every step or two, the two investigators would press the green button on the top of the their GPSLOC's, and whenever they would note something of pending interest, they would point the butt of the device at what they were looking at and press the black button next to it; a laser would pinpoint exactly what they were marking. When forensics would enter the scene, which undoubtedly they were already in the alley, all the data that Smith and Van Hollen were logging, would instantly appear on their data slates. Their individual paths would appear in solid green lines across the rendered topography. Their "data of pending interest" would appear as red X's, highlighted by their exact GPS location.
Smith stopped and looked back over her shoulder, the wall, where Officer "Joe" still stood, looked like a short fence, and Joe, a child determined to straddle it. She inhaled deeply and blew out the pent up breath, the exercise concluded with a bought of violent coughing.
"You okay, Ms. Smith?" the young officer asked as she straightened up, wiping her mouth.
"It's 'Miss', and yes," she spat the bile into the grass, and "shot" it with the blue button, marking it as "investigator introduced." She hated this part of the job. She would never let on, but she absolutely hated it. Give me the paperwork. Let me interview people.
She swept her vision in a slow arch down into the park, until she found Van Hollen, a bright red speck against a backdrop of golden yellow. She wasn't moving. Isabele could tell that, even at this distance.
Her phone rang, the ringtone jarring on her last nerve. She dug it out with her right hand, her left hand disappearing into the over-sized pocket on that side of her jacket.
"Felicity," she stated. She never used the young woman's first name.
"Isabele," the voice on the other end was shaking. "Right here. There is blood. A lot of it."
"Maybe they came up that way and when they went back over, some went back the way they came, one or two went in to the North there, and one went in to the South, there."
His audience followed the movements of his hands, like the heads of small dogs following the master's treat.
Isabele looked down the grassy hill, down towards the lake and the hazy far side of Crater Park and sucked her teeth. "Is Fletcher right there?"
Joe looked back over his shoulder. "Inspector Fletcher!" he called into the alley. "He's coming," he informed the expectant group. With a snap of his head he indicated when Fletcher had arrived.
"Fletcher?" Isabele shouted.
"Yes, Isabele."
"Fletcher, we're gonna have to go into the park."
"I thought as much," came the response. "Proceed with caution."
Isabele turned to her partner as she dug in an inside pocket, producing a black device, like a bicycle grip. "Well?" she asked as she pressed a button on the flat washer-like top.
"Oh." Felicity said dryly, tucking her chin in. "It's in the car. I left mine in my handbag."
"Not gonna help you do you job there, now is it," Isabele scolded quietly.
"Fletcher," she called back over the wall. "Van Hollen forgot her Jipsloc"
An identical black device came floating up into Joe's hands on the wall and with a flic he tossed the GPS Locator to Felicity.
"You do have your camera, right?" Isabele said from the top of her eyes as she finalized the setting on the GPSLOC.
Felicity nodded eagerly.
"Anything that looks remotely suspicious, shoot it. We'll go over it back at the house,"
"Right," Felicity acknowledged smartly as she set her GPSLOC.
"You." Isabele pointed at the younger officer who had kept Felicity talking, rapid fire, for the entire walk. "You're with me," and she turned out to follow the "North" trail as Felicity turned to follow the heavily traveled trail straight down into the park.
They followed off to the side, not wanting to disturb any microscopic evidence that might still remain on the beaten down path. They moved slowly in the tall grass, scanning the trail with meticulous, trained eyes. It's amazing how wonderful of a creation the brain is. How a carpenter will see a sixteenth or a thirty-second of an inch; or how a trained investigator will see the outline of a footprint in living grass.
Every step or two, the two investigators would press the green button on the top of the their GPSLOC's, and whenever they would note something of pending interest, they would point the butt of the device at what they were looking at and press the black button next to it; a laser would pinpoint exactly what they were marking. When forensics would enter the scene, which undoubtedly they were already in the alley, all the data that Smith and Van Hollen were logging, would instantly appear on their data slates. Their individual paths would appear in solid green lines across the rendered topography. Their "data of pending interest" would appear as red X's, highlighted by their exact GPS location.
Smith stopped and looked back over her shoulder, the wall, where Officer "Joe" still stood, looked like a short fence, and Joe, a child determined to straddle it. She inhaled deeply and blew out the pent up breath, the exercise concluded with a bought of violent coughing.
"You okay, Ms. Smith?" the young officer asked as she straightened up, wiping her mouth.
"It's 'Miss', and yes," she spat the bile into the grass, and "shot" it with the blue button, marking it as "investigator introduced." She hated this part of the job. She would never let on, but she absolutely hated it. Give me the paperwork. Let me interview people.
She swept her vision in a slow arch down into the park, until she found Van Hollen, a bright red speck against a backdrop of golden yellow. She wasn't moving. Isabele could tell that, even at this distance.
Her phone rang, the ringtone jarring on her last nerve. She dug it out with her right hand, her left hand disappearing into the over-sized pocket on that side of her jacket.
"Felicity," she stated. She never used the young woman's first name.
"Isabele," the voice on the other end was shaking. "Right here. There is blood. A lot of it."
Monday, April 2, 2007
Editorial Comment
{[(yes. Bullets are harder and have much more inertia than brick. Brick is porous and so if you shot it, it would leave an impact crater. Much like Crater Park. Only smaller, of course.
Okay. Time line is good. I had been thinking about the "when" of the story. Are we thinking 2007 or more? like 2015 or something like that, or maybe "just tomorrow" where we might have a few clever devices (you guys know how much I love clever devices) I have a line on Isabele and F. that I think is kinda cool, but I'll keep it to myself right now, see what y'all come up with.
The problem with having a great big, deep crater in the middle of a city is that cities, the size of New York and Tokyo take years, decades, centuries, to build and so, unless it was a geological formation that was created by God that the city was built around, you wouldn't be able to have any mystery about it. Unless that just it. Nobody does know how it got there. Sorta mass amnesia or something. Hmm. A little paranormal, but it could be made to work. Maybe it's something in the water. Haha)]}
Okay. Time line is good. I had been thinking about the "when" of the story. Are we thinking 2007 or more? like 2015 or something like that, or maybe "just tomorrow" where we might have a few clever devices (you guys know how much I love clever devices) I have a line on Isabele and F. that I think is kinda cool, but I'll keep it to myself right now, see what y'all come up with.
The problem with having a great big, deep crater in the middle of a city is that cities, the size of New York and Tokyo take years, decades, centuries, to build and so, unless it was a geological formation that was created by God that the city was built around, you wouldn't be able to have any mystery about it. Unless that just it. Nobody does know how it got there. Sorta mass amnesia or something. Hmm. A little paranormal, but it could be made to work. Maybe it's something in the water. Haha)]}
Wednesday, March 28, 2007
Chapter 1, Part Aii
"Van Hollen," Isabele began as she sank into the passenger seat of their cruiser, "What's with the tights?" she finished, another gnarled deathstick between her lips waggling crazily as she spoke. With a groan she leaned out from the corner, where the seat back and the door met, and pushed the cigarette lighter in.
"Isabele, they're not tights. They're leggings," Felicity corrected as she eased through the police barricade. She lowered her window half way, "Thank you," she piped, with a bright smile at the handsome patrol officer, who tugged the bill of his smart police hat in response. "Tights are thinner: nylon or cotton, a little Lycra; and they have feet. Leggings are 'close fitting trousers' without feet. 'Never sacrifice comfort for fashion's sake' my mentor always told me. And it was freezing out there. And besides, socks with tights would just be awful. And wear my good boots in that nasty alley? I don't think so."
The cigarette lighter clicked and Felicity looked over at her partner as she made a right hand turn. Isabele leaned crumpled in the corner, breathing heavily, unlit cigarette in her lap.
"Isabele Smith: chain-smoking, chronic ecophobic insomniac," she murmured under her breath as she plucked the cigarette off of Isabele's lap and flicked it out the cracked window. "Not on my watch," she continued in a matter-of-fact whisper, as she made another right turn and applied the brake, the car stopping at a metal barricade. The same kind that you see on the freeway.
"I thought as much," Felicity said out loud as she opened her door and stepped out. She slammed it shut. Hard. Smiling mischievously as Isabele Smith started awake.
She walked, hands in her pockets to the front of the car, just short of the barricade, shook her head as the breeze blew across her hair, pulling at the wispies that dared to flaunt themselves, staring out across the panorama before her.
"Oh, for cryin'" Isabele mumbled as she staggered next to Felicity, crumpling the empty package that used to hold what her monster so desperately wanted. "Could this morning get any worse?"
And then she looked up.
"Oh, You Have Got to Be Kidding ME!" Isabele Smith shouted, fists clenched.
It was a crater. A mile in diameter, six hundred feet deep at it center, and that was to the surface of the twenty acre lake that pooled there. Scraggly tree covered tussocks, and rolling brown hills, that shone like dirty emeralds in the spring, surrounded the glorified pond; neglected red stone paths crisscrossed in and out of the landscape. Across the crater, a lone jogger, a blue bipedal speck, was working his way up and out and away.
"Boss. It's Crater Park," Felicity turned to view her partner talking into a cellphone that was larger than her hand, it had to be at least ten years old, as the patrol officers came up to join them. "And there is a jogger leaving to the Northwest. Looks blue from here. Mm-hm.
"Can you have a Uniform climb up on the wall and wave?" She started toward the barricade and then past, down onto the washed-out dirt trail that had been forced into existence by eager children and adventurous adults trying to "save a little time." "Yah. I see 'im. Thanks.
"Is Harper buying breakfast? Well past, huh.
"We're on our way." She pressed the phone off and stuffed it back inside her coat.
"Are you coming, Van Hollen? Or should I send you an invitation?"
"I'm coming. Yes," and to make good on her word she started awkwardly in Isabele's wake.
"Here, let me help you," one the patrol officer's offered his arm.
"Oh, thank you," she smiled with every tooth, as she placed her hand on top of his wrist.
"Oh, brother," Isabele mumbled, too low for her companions to hear.
It was a quiet, fairly short, if not uneven walk around the perimeter of Crater Park, along the narrow, rebel foot trails to the alley wall. There weren't any winter birds, no errant rabbits scurrying for their lives, no rustle of life anywhere. Just the crunch crunch of Felicity's ankle boots in the light gravel, and the tuneless humming of the rearguard patrol officer to keep them company.
They came to the wall, and the officer still sitting on one end of it, feet dangling over on the park side, heels thumping the brick absentmindedly.
"Comfortable, Joe?" Isabele asked as she stopped about fifteen feet from the end of the wall.
"No," he replied, pursing his lips, and shaking his head slightly.
"Backsides' frozen solid. I think I'll be stuck here till spring.
"Took you long enough."
Isabele snapped her head backwards, towards Felicity and her "attendant" and winked. "Didn't want the young one to be embarrassed so I took it easy getting over here. She doesn't have her hiking boots on."
"Oh, be nice," Felicity said, mock scolding the two as she pulled out a small digital camera and began snapping images of the immediate area.
"Tell me what you see, Joe," Isabele instructed the officer who was now standing on the wall as she began to dig in her pockets. She pulled out the small plastic wrapped package that she had just crumpled up and frowned.
{[(I think you guys are starting to get the hang of it, so I won't prompt you with many questions. We are at a decision making point: look at what you know and post away. There were some posts about a time limit for recieving ideas. So far, for me, because of my schedual, that hasn't been a problem. My biggest problem is not being able to post as frequently as I would like. If I had it my way, I would be turning this around once a week, maybe every ten days, NOT once every two weeks or more. Keep it up! Hang in there! Don't get bored on me! Note the updated element on the right (at the bottom of the guidelines)!)]}
"Isabele, they're not tights. They're leggings," Felicity corrected as she eased through the police barricade. She lowered her window half way, "Thank you," she piped, with a bright smile at the handsome patrol officer, who tugged the bill of his smart police hat in response. "Tights are thinner: nylon or cotton, a little Lycra; and they have feet. Leggings are 'close fitting trousers' without feet. 'Never sacrifice comfort for fashion's sake' my mentor always told me. And it was freezing out there. And besides, socks with tights would just be awful. And wear my good boots in that nasty alley? I don't think so."
The cigarette lighter clicked and Felicity looked over at her partner as she made a right hand turn. Isabele leaned crumpled in the corner, breathing heavily, unlit cigarette in her lap.
"Isabele Smith: chain-smoking, chronic ecophobic insomniac," she murmured under her breath as she plucked the cigarette off of Isabele's lap and flicked it out the cracked window. "Not on my watch," she continued in a matter-of-fact whisper, as she made another right turn and applied the brake, the car stopping at a metal barricade. The same kind that you see on the freeway.
"I thought as much," Felicity said out loud as she opened her door and stepped out. She slammed it shut. Hard. Smiling mischievously as Isabele Smith started awake.
She walked, hands in her pockets to the front of the car, just short of the barricade, shook her head as the breeze blew across her hair, pulling at the wispies that dared to flaunt themselves, staring out across the panorama before her.
"Oh, for cryin'" Isabele mumbled as she staggered next to Felicity, crumpling the empty package that used to hold what her monster so desperately wanted. "Could this morning get any worse?"
And then she looked up.
"Oh, You Have Got to Be Kidding ME!" Isabele Smith shouted, fists clenched.
It was a crater. A mile in diameter, six hundred feet deep at it center, and that was to the surface of the twenty acre lake that pooled there. Scraggly tree covered tussocks, and rolling brown hills, that shone like dirty emeralds in the spring, surrounded the glorified pond; neglected red stone paths crisscrossed in and out of the landscape. Across the crater, a lone jogger, a blue bipedal speck, was working his way up and out and away.
"Boss. It's Crater Park," Felicity turned to view her partner talking into a cellphone that was larger than her hand, it had to be at least ten years old, as the patrol officers came up to join them. "And there is a jogger leaving to the Northwest. Looks blue from here. Mm-hm.
"Can you have a Uniform climb up on the wall and wave?" She started toward the barricade and then past, down onto the washed-out dirt trail that had been forced into existence by eager children and adventurous adults trying to "save a little time." "Yah. I see 'im. Thanks.
"Is Harper buying breakfast? Well past, huh.
"We're on our way." She pressed the phone off and stuffed it back inside her coat.
"Are you coming, Van Hollen? Or should I send you an invitation?"
"I'm coming. Yes," and to make good on her word she started awkwardly in Isabele's wake.
"Here, let me help you," one the patrol officer's offered his arm.
"Oh, thank you," she smiled with every tooth, as she placed her hand on top of his wrist.
"Oh, brother," Isabele mumbled, too low for her companions to hear.
It was a quiet, fairly short, if not uneven walk around the perimeter of Crater Park, along the narrow, rebel foot trails to the alley wall. There weren't any winter birds, no errant rabbits scurrying for their lives, no rustle of life anywhere. Just the crunch crunch of Felicity's ankle boots in the light gravel, and the tuneless humming of the rearguard patrol officer to keep them company.
They came to the wall, and the officer still sitting on one end of it, feet dangling over on the park side, heels thumping the brick absentmindedly.
"Comfortable, Joe?" Isabele asked as she stopped about fifteen feet from the end of the wall.
"No," he replied, pursing his lips, and shaking his head slightly.
"Backsides' frozen solid. I think I'll be stuck here till spring.
"Took you long enough."
Isabele snapped her head backwards, towards Felicity and her "attendant" and winked. "Didn't want the young one to be embarrassed so I took it easy getting over here. She doesn't have her hiking boots on."
"Oh, be nice," Felicity said, mock scolding the two as she pulled out a small digital camera and began snapping images of the immediate area.
"Tell me what you see, Joe," Isabele instructed the officer who was now standing on the wall as she began to dig in her pockets. She pulled out the small plastic wrapped package that she had just crumpled up and frowned.
{[(I think you guys are starting to get the hang of it, so I won't prompt you with many questions. We are at a decision making point: look at what you know and post away. There were some posts about a time limit for recieving ideas. So far, for me, because of my schedual, that hasn't been a problem. My biggest problem is not being able to post as frequently as I would like. If I had it my way, I would be turning this around once a week, maybe every ten days, NOT once every two weeks or more. Keep it up! Hang in there! Don't get bored on me! Note the updated element on the right (at the bottom of the guidelines)!)]}
Monday, March 19, 2007
Ooooo, Clever Clever!
{[(Some of yoos just made it in before I just went ahead and worked with what had been given to me. So far so gude! Keep it up! I'll get to it soon. I promise.)]}
Friday, March 9, 2007
Chapter 1, Part Ai
"Well?" Fletcher Gereld asked again. He was a tall, skinny man, at the least six-two, with shoulders that curved inwards and a neck that, besides looking to long, bowed, like a vultures. He was dressed in a brown three piece suit that looked like something his grandfather had been buried in. His overcoat was an equally pathetic example of men's clothing. A stiff, cold wind knifed down into the alley, tugging at the gray hair that protruded wildly out from under the only decent article of clothing he had on: a new, leather, carrimac ivy cap.
"Stupid Boy Scouts," Isabele murmured as she brought out a palm sized, plastic wrapped package and began fumbling at the contents. She managed to extract one of the deathly little white cylinders, badly bent and twisted, the lethal end smashed almost flat, and placed it between her lips as she began searching for a means of satisfying the craving beast within her.
"Those things will kill you, you know," Felicity stated with a sardonic smile. She was five-four, a hundred and twenty-five pounds, and dressed to the nines in a smart red, woolen skirt with matching tailor-made jacket, tied precisely with a two inch black patent leather belt. Ankle high boots, that matched the belt, with fur trimmed throats and two inch heels, kept her small feet warm, as black and red checkered leggings disappeared under an at-the-knee hem. The outer edges of the ruffled collar and cuffs of her white blouse, protruding out from under her jacket, fluttered sporadically in the icy breeze.
"You deal with stress in your own fashion.
"Stupid lighter" Isabele groused absentmindedly as she threw her cigarette away disgustedly. Then as if she suddenly realized what had been said to her she turned crossly on the young girl with the flaming red hair, tied in twin French braids down her back. "You're more likely to be run over crossin' the street than I am to die of cancer!" And she ground the heels of her hands into her eyes, exacerbating the insomnia bruises, before she began to vigorously scrub her scalp, pulling her hair loose from the messy knot. Turning her face into the breeze she combed her hair with her fingers, the gray developing at her temples shot contrasting color through the long blue-black mane that snapped in the wind. Quickly she pulled it into another messy topknot at the back of the crown of her head.
"Forget to pay the power again, Izzy?" Calvin asked as he approached the three, looking Isabele up and down, taking in the yellow sneakers, the blue running pants with the white stripe down the side, the cream "I-Love-Anywhere-But-Here" sweater with the dripping green print, and the oversized duck-cloth carpenters jacket.
"Stupid Boy Scouts," Isabele murmured as she brought out a palm sized, plastic wrapped package and began fumbling at the contents. She managed to extract one of the deathly little white cylinders, badly bent and twisted, the lethal end smashed almost flat, and placed it between her lips as she began searching for a means of satisfying the craving beast within her.
"Those things will kill you, you know," Felicity stated with a sardonic smile. She was five-four, a hundred and twenty-five pounds, and dressed to the nines in a smart red, woolen skirt with matching tailor-made jacket, tied precisely with a two inch black patent leather belt. Ankle high boots, that matched the belt, with fur trimmed throats and two inch heels, kept her small feet warm, as black and red checkered leggings disappeared under an at-the-knee hem. The outer edges of the ruffled collar and cuffs of her white blouse, protruding out from under her jacket, fluttered sporadically in the icy breeze.
"You deal with stress in your own fashion.
"Stupid lighter" Isabele groused absentmindedly as she threw her cigarette away disgustedly. Then as if she suddenly realized what had been said to her she turned crossly on the young girl with the flaming red hair, tied in twin French braids down her back. "You're more likely to be run over crossin' the street than I am to die of cancer!" And she ground the heels of her hands into her eyes, exacerbating the insomnia bruises, before she began to vigorously scrub her scalp, pulling her hair loose from the messy knot. Turning her face into the breeze she combed her hair with her fingers, the gray developing at her temples shot contrasting color through the long blue-black mane that snapped in the wind. Quickly she pulled it into another messy topknot at the back of the crown of her head.
"Forget to pay the power again, Izzy?" Calvin asked as he approached the three, looking Isabele up and down, taking in the yellow sneakers, the blue running pants with the white stripe down the side, the cream "I-Love-Anywhere-But-Here" sweater with the dripping green print, and the oversized duck-cloth carpenters jacket.
"Haha," Isabele sneered as she took the steaming Styrofoam cup of Ain't Got Time for Sleep brand, jumbo sized coffee out of Calvin's hand and began drinking.
She turned back towards Gereld, who's brown eyes were flicking over the entire alley, squinting in the waxing morning light, contemplatively adding up the "evidence" in his head. He was sixty-something, or so the rest of the group thought, there was an ongoing pool back at the house, looked well past retirement, but was still the cheifs favorite. Something about a photographic memory. He had turned down so many advancements that the city had finally stopped offering them. He like being in the field, something about how a desk "affects the human physiology" or something like that. Everybody had stopped trying to figure it out.
"Calvin?" Gereld asked without looking at the dapper young man.
"Dispatch received a call," Calvin began as he shoved his hands down into the pockets of his charcoal wool overcoat. It still smelled of the store. "At three-thirty that there was quote 'man a crazy load of fightin' man'. The caller refused to provide I.D. and hung up. Dispatch traced it to the phone booth down the block," he motioned with his head, up the alley and over. "Forensics is dusting it. Local patrol was sent here and when they finally got here, at four-fifteen, they found this" pulling his gloved hands out he spread them wide, palms up, thumbs out, taking in the entire scene. "Patrol is canvassing. So far, their not turning up any information. You could bring the Third I.D. and the Seventh Cav. down here and let them light each other up and no one would notice. Except some local indigent, like what seems to be the case here."
"Is that your initial thought?" Gereld asked somberly, his smooth face not betraying any expression. "That the Third I.D. and the Seventh Cav. decided to have a turf war in the middle of the industrial sector?"
Calvin just smiled, warmly, and adjusted his wire rimmed glasses.
"Isabele. Do you still think that this is the work of Boy scouts?" he asked as he crouched down, peering under a dumpster.
Isabele mumbled something unintelligible.
"Felicity? Do you have any thoughts about this?"
Both Calvin and Isabele sniggered under their collective breath.
"To early to tell, Mr. Gereld." Felicity shot the two a dungeoness look. "Of the evidence, there is absolutely no shortage. The crime scene is positively enormous; starting down there, " she turned at the hips and pointed with a delicate, black leather gloved hand at the yellow police tape at the mouth of the alley, "and ending there," she pivoted and pointed at the dead-end wall, some ten or twelve feet high. "Forensics is going to love this one, positively."
"If a crime was even committed" Isabele slurped "her" coffee.
"Ah," Fletcher Gereld smiled smally.
The others turned in the direction that their leader was facing, just in time to watch the sun crown the small Five and Dime store across the street from the alley, its rays shooting down into the alley like wild colts chasing butterflies on the high mountain slopes.
Fletcher Gereld stood a little straighter, gaining a little more altitude over his subordinates, his posture just as awful as ever. Calvin squared his shoulders and set his jaw. Isabele closed her eyes, exhaled deeply, and sort of slumped while still standing. Felicity bunched her shoulders and shivered, pulled the collar on her jacket up and buckled the patent leather clasp.
"Isabele. You and Felicity get a patrol and go around to the other side of this wall. Calvin. . ."
"Done," Calvin finished and began walking down the alley.
She turned back towards Gereld, who's brown eyes were flicking over the entire alley, squinting in the waxing morning light, contemplatively adding up the "evidence" in his head. He was sixty-something, or so the rest of the group thought, there was an ongoing pool back at the house, looked well past retirement, but was still the cheifs favorite. Something about a photographic memory. He had turned down so many advancements that the city had finally stopped offering them. He like being in the field, something about how a desk "affects the human physiology" or something like that. Everybody had stopped trying to figure it out.
"Calvin?" Gereld asked without looking at the dapper young man.
"Dispatch received a call," Calvin began as he shoved his hands down into the pockets of his charcoal wool overcoat. It still smelled of the store. "At three-thirty that there was quote 'man a crazy load of fightin' man'. The caller refused to provide I.D. and hung up. Dispatch traced it to the phone booth down the block," he motioned with his head, up the alley and over. "Forensics is dusting it. Local patrol was sent here and when they finally got here, at four-fifteen, they found this" pulling his gloved hands out he spread them wide, palms up, thumbs out, taking in the entire scene. "Patrol is canvassing. So far, their not turning up any information. You could bring the Third I.D. and the Seventh Cav. down here and let them light each other up and no one would notice. Except some local indigent, like what seems to be the case here."
"Is that your initial thought?" Gereld asked somberly, his smooth face not betraying any expression. "That the Third I.D. and the Seventh Cav. decided to have a turf war in the middle of the industrial sector?"
Calvin just smiled, warmly, and adjusted his wire rimmed glasses.
"Isabele. Do you still think that this is the work of Boy scouts?" he asked as he crouched down, peering under a dumpster.
Isabele mumbled something unintelligible.
"Felicity? Do you have any thoughts about this?"
Both Calvin and Isabele sniggered under their collective breath.
"To early to tell, Mr. Gereld." Felicity shot the two a dungeoness look. "Of the evidence, there is absolutely no shortage. The crime scene is positively enormous; starting down there, " she turned at the hips and pointed with a delicate, black leather gloved hand at the yellow police tape at the mouth of the alley, "and ending there," she pivoted and pointed at the dead-end wall, some ten or twelve feet high. "Forensics is going to love this one, positively."
"If a crime was even committed" Isabele slurped "her" coffee.
"Ah," Fletcher Gereld smiled smally.
The others turned in the direction that their leader was facing, just in time to watch the sun crown the small Five and Dime store across the street from the alley, its rays shooting down into the alley like wild colts chasing butterflies on the high mountain slopes.
Fletcher Gereld stood a little straighter, gaining a little more altitude over his subordinates, his posture just as awful as ever. Calvin squared his shoulders and set his jaw. Isabele closed her eyes, exhaled deeply, and sort of slumped while still standing. Felicity bunched her shoulders and shivered, pulled the collar on her jacket up and buckled the patent leather clasp.
"Isabele. You and Felicity get a patrol and go around to the other side of this wall. Calvin. . ."
"Done," Calvin finished and began walking down the alley.
{[(As you will notice, only one charcter has a last name. That's because he's the only character that had names suggested for him that actually worked as a last name. Need last names for the three additional charcters. What are the facts? Where might the facts lead? Is there anything on the other side of the wall? If so: what? Will forensics turn up anything at the phone booth? If so: what? Will the canvass reveal anything? If so: what? Where do we go next? Read the new element added to the page)]}
Wednesday, February 28, 2007
Chapter 1. Part A
Spent casings, littered the ground like confetti after a parade. Those are the little pieces of brass that are left over, after you've used a bullet, not the pieces of colored paper. They were every were. Spread about like seeds from a hand, sown destruction, not grain; little, cute, pyramid like piles, all by themselves; small handfuls of five or six or eight in a starburst pattern three feet in diameter. And that was it. No bullet impacts anywhere. No twisted led from a ricochet. No sign of any injury.
"Anybody got any explanations?"
{[(Where is this taking place? What time of day is it? Who's talking? What do they look like? How old are they? Who are they talking to? How many people are there? How old are the people being talked to? What are their names? What do they look like?)]}
"Anybody got any explanations?"
{[(Where is this taking place? What time of day is it? Who's talking? What do they look like? How old are they? Who are they talking to? How many people are there? How old are the people being talked to? What are their names? What do they look like?)]}
The Begining
"And so it begins" - King Theodin at Helm's Deep as the rains began.
So here's the deal: This is going to be a story. We'll see where it goes. We'll let it drive itself. I need your help. I will be writing the body of the story but I need you to provide me with the directions. Kinda like a ghost writing in reverse. I'm the driver, but I'm blindfolded, oh, and I have head phones on, and my mouth has been duct-taped shut. The only thing I can do is write, and communicate by braille.
What I am going to do, is pick from your suggestions what I should do: what the characters' names should be; are they male or female? How old are they? Where should the story go next? What is the setting? Is the action dramatic or comedic? And so-on and so-forth and everything like that. We'll figure it out as we go. To start with, I'll open it with a starting sentence, maybe a little more. And then it's up to you. I'll end it with a requisition inside braces, inside brackets, inside parenthesis so that it can't be confused as text.
All right. You have your orders. Get to it
So here's the deal: This is going to be a story. We'll see where it goes. We'll let it drive itself. I need your help. I will be writing the body of the story but I need you to provide me with the directions. Kinda like a ghost writing in reverse. I'm the driver, but I'm blindfolded, oh, and I have head phones on, and my mouth has been duct-taped shut. The only thing I can do is write, and communicate by braille.
What I am going to do, is pick from your suggestions what I should do: what the characters' names should be; are they male or female? How old are they? Where should the story go next? What is the setting? Is the action dramatic or comedic? And so-on and so-forth and everything like that. We'll figure it out as we go. To start with, I'll open it with a starting sentence, maybe a little more. And then it's up to you. I'll end it with a requisition inside braces, inside brackets, inside parenthesis so that it can't be confused as text.
All right. You have your orders. Get to it
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